Father to Son: A naked Mind[Short Story]

Feb 28 2008  | Views 899 |  Comments  (8)
“Excuse me, Sir!” mumbled Animesh in a possible irritated-yet-sound... Expand

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  Dream Pedlar posted 5 mnths ago


MQ,

yes .. thansk for reading this blog so minutely ... i went thru it  after i read ur point ... and yes.. that is indeed a mistake over here.... i should have specified the speaker in that sentence ... it sounds ambiguous otherwise .. thanks for the feedback ....MQ..:)))

cheerio
dp



  Melody Queen posted 5 mnths ago

Pedlar
A very topical subject for a story and nicely narrated too.
And so many inter-layered thoughts...
<resources, to maintain and run the organization” HE suddenly felt very tired, the already blatant world just suddenly seemed more naked to him. Man’s>

I find a little confusion there due to the pronoun. Would be unambiguous if you used Banerjee's proper name instead. Just my thoughts...



  Dream Pedlar posted 6 mnths ago



hi moonriver... 
r u pointing to the "right" thing that banerjee said? or the entire dialogue ? if its only the "right" thing then i guess its justified... from my point of view...
what i tried to portray in this story in banherjee's character was he's quite a flambouyant person, capable and progressive, yet ... down to earth at heart .. and in this particular scene ... he's pissed of with the mentality of animesh, and wanted to prove a point, i.e, an outburst and an assertion .... so i included this "right" at the end of the dialogue ...  whats ur take on this view of mine?
i would love such comments in future ... if ye dont mind .. :)))

cheerio
dp



  Dream Pedlar posted 6 mnths ago



hi ashualec.. Thanks a lot ... for bearing with this long long story ...  welcome to my blogosphere...

cheerio
dp



  anjana_jha posted 6 mnths ago

Thought-provoking story... touches an issue that is becoming very important as the percentage of old people is steadily increasing...  



  Kalyanee posted 6 mnths ago

Pedlar,
Dat was a good story!! A bit long but nice....
by the way, shud it be :
 “Hmm, you wanted to know when I am flying back to America. Right?   ”Yea, if you don’t mind”, muttered Animesh (shud be the old guy saying dis right)??



  ashualec posted 6 mnths ago

very well written





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